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offline marlowe from Antarctica on 2003-09-04 05:36 [#00849277]
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The May Princess, she stands alone and young,
with festal chains she throws her arms aloft;
arrayed around her tender thighs are slung
the wayward streams of stripy verdure soft.

The golden maid revealed before the throng,
her virgin flesh exposed and moist, so bare;
converses sweetly with the drove in song,
as moving slowly to the brook they fare.

Once by the water'd bank, they praise their maid
with garlands chaste, and stalks of ochre corn;
thus praised and so adored, the girl cascades
in to the water, drowned to be reborn.

The May Princess, she gave her life to be
old Nature's bride for all eternity.

· 03 September 03 ·


 

offline marlowe from Antarctica on 2003-09-04 05:37 [#00849278]
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sonnet:

3 stanzas of 4 lines, one ending couplet. total of 14 lines.
Rhyme scheme: ABAB, CDCD EFEF GG

10 syllables per line

iambic pentameter (Iambus is one short vowel followe by one
long vowel)


 

offline recycle from Where is Phobiazero (Lincoln) (United States) on 2003-09-04 06:03 [#00849293]
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very nice paul, you have an excellant way with words


 

offline uzim on 2003-09-04 06:48 [#00849334]
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yes! i like it too. : )

besides you explained me a >[] title.


 

offline pomme de terre from obscure body in the SK System on 2003-09-04 06:55 [#00849339]
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best sonnet anyone has ever posted on xlt.


 

offline JAroen from the pineal gland on 2003-09-04 08:07 [#00849400]
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only sonnet anyone has ever posted

:P

nah just kidding

like it !


 

offline od_step_cloak from Pleth (Australia) on 2003-09-04 08:51 [#00849476]
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yeah man it's very good!
nice one


 

offline ambsace from canaDUH. on 2003-09-04 22:24 [#00850784]
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wow. that was really good. i'll be honest here (eep. don't
stone me) and say that i haven't cared much for some of the
poetry that you've posted around, but THIS...this is great.
i really like this. *looks at his own shitty sonnet
attempts* keep sharing with us, yeah? =]


 

offline Q4Z2X on 2003-09-04 22:42 [#00850807]
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yes.. your stuff has improved quite a bit, nice work mr. m.


 

offline marlowe from Antarctica on 2003-09-05 06:15 [#00851028]
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thanks people - don't fret it ambsace - I don't expect
everyone to like everything I do! :D I'm glad you enjoyed
this tho - it took me ages to get it right! :D


 

offline recycle from Where is Phobiazero (Lincoln) (United States) on 2003-09-05 07:08 [#00851073]
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we need another one !


 

offline marlowe from Antarctica on 2003-09-07 10:28 [#00853903]
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I have just bought a book of English Sonnets to study, and
will attempt a second sonnet anon !


 

offline anon from ^_^ (United Kingdom) on 2003-09-07 10:51 [#00853955]
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marlowe would you mind terribly if i stole your brain? i
wanna be able to write that good! mine suck... in fact my
brother laughed at my last attempt at poetry... :(

*wallows in mud and misery*


 

offline marlowe from Antarctica on 2003-09-07 13:02 [#00854082]
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The next open space for Brain-Renting is in a little of a
thousand years - up until then, I'm afraid I'm fully
booked!

Don't worry about your poetry being pasted by your pederast
prother..(hmm).. just don't write too many clichés!! :P
(I'm not saying you do - god I hope I haven't given you a
complex now, I haven't even read your stuff- let me read it
and tell you what I think . . oh god, now I sound
patronising. must stop....GAH!


 

offline Anus_Presley on 2003-09-08 05:52 [#00854790]
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just who the fuck do you think you arre, the big poet man
ey?

btw marlowe, grreat sonnet. i was rreading some of yourr
otherr poems on that allpoetry site, you have a verry
distinct style, you rremind me of a poet whose name I can't
rrememberr now.
good job.


 

offline marlowe from Antarctica on 2003-09-08 08:55 [#00854973]
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Thanks A.P. - and thanks for checking out my AP site, A.P. !


 


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