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offline cygnus from nowhere and everyplace on 2002-07-08 15:30 [#00301571]
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I swallowed all of the pills and fell asleep, spinning.
Waking up the next morning, I was in a different place. A
place unlike Earth.

The architecture of everything around me... was geometric,
and very luminescent.. architecture. I realized this entire
place's light source was these objects!

The plants, the mountains, tiny pebbles were cubes and
triangles. Most triangles. Some of them moving on their own
and others just resting, and glowing with purple, blue and
greenish lights. They were neon with very calm, glowing
colors and I could see-through them.

I got up to climb one of the larger mountains I'd seen,
taking frequent naps along the way and sometimes stopping to
look at the large, spinning galaxies above the sky, the
colors were so beautiful, just moving and interacting like
people would. Reaching the top of the mountain, I saw
civilization! But there were no buildings! It was only
people, individuals. I walked down to introduce myself.


 

offline Bob Mcbob on 2002-07-08 15:36 [#00301583]
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they petted me and fed me fish and sausers of milk. they
tickled me under the chin. they gave me a litter tray made
out of flakes of snow.


 

offline uzim on 2002-07-08 15:41 [#00301591]
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these people looked very strange... their eyes were
triangular too, and they didn't seem to be able to speak, or
to emit any sounds; they were communicating with their eyes
instead. they could change the color or their weird eyes.
when they saw me, their eyes lit up green... maybe it was
expressing surprise? i hope it weren't expressing fear, nor
willing to fight or appetite!

one of them walked towards me... it seemed to be a female.
her eyes were lit up green too, but not of the same green...
it was rather yellowish green. i was very confused, not
knowing what it meant. maybe she was some sort of leader. i
started to be very afraid as she opened her mouth, and
something ressembling to a snake came out of it...


 

offline uzim on 2002-07-08 15:43 [#00301593]
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(two sequels... this is what happens when you take your
time... ' _ ')


 

offline cygnus from nowhere and everyplace on 2002-07-08 15:50 [#00301609]
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uzim!!! thats fucking brilliant


 

offline mccabe from fuck knows .......I`m lost !!! on 2002-07-08 15:50 [#00301611]
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and the snake like tongue whipped out in front of me,slicing
the very fabric of space and time,opening a strange
transparent void.The green eyed female took my hand and we
entered....


 

offline uzim on 2002-07-08 15:51 [#00301612]
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really? thanks, you too! :)


 

offline cygnus from nowhere and everyplace on 2002-07-08 16:08 [#00301628]
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her cybernetic hand was cold and metallic, but i could still
recognize the female touch. it was soft and soothing to feel
and had tiny blue and purple wires coming off the back of
it.


 

offline recycle from Where is Phobiazero (Lincoln) (United States) on 2002-07-08 16:11 [#00301632]
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dont take acid


 

offline mccabe from fuck knows .......I`m lost !!! on 2002-07-08 16:22 [#00301653]
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I felt dizzy,what was happening ,where am I going,is this
real....I tried but could not speak,she held my hand tighter
& tighter,a strange noise was getting louder,I couldnt
move...


 

offline uzim on 2002-07-08 16:23 [#00301655]
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as we entered the weird place, which looked like a garden
around a temple, the other people started to fade then
disappeared... her eyes turned completely yellow, and she
started to move towards me a strange way... she opened her
mouth again, but this time she was saying or singing
something... of course, i didn't understand a single word,
and she noticed it. she looked a bit upset, said
something... and then a metallic probe came out of her head
and entered mine — i was really scared... but i could
understand her language through the probe... she said "i'm
going to take you to the machina priest, you need this to
survive in our world", and took me to the temple...


 

offline cygnus from nowhere and everyplace on 2002-07-08 18:32 [#00301755]
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but that was this whole weekend!!!


 

offline dingle berry from on a small plastic chair breat (Haiti) on 2002-07-08 18:36 [#00301761]
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when i awoke i realised the alien beings had sown my penis
shut and had grafted my mouth onto my left buttcheek!
as i shook the heavy anasthetic from my dizzy head i cried
out of my ass "SOMEBODY HELP ME!"


 

offline uzim on 2002-07-08 20:10 [#00301856]
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lol dingle berry ^^

...and then little aliens, probably kids, came in the
temple, laughing and giggling... they said to me "don't
worry we were just kidding! sleep now, it's not done!", and
injected me some substance with a squirt. then i fell
asleep/unconscious again.

i don't know how much time it took, but when i woke up again
i felt strange, a little heavy and cold... i touched my
hands and realised they were made of metal and... well, it
was a tremendous shock for me — i had become an alien!

i got out of the temple... the alien girl was waiting for
me, when she saw me arriving, her eyes turned pink. sign
that she was happy (now i could understand this weird eye
color language. it was used only to express feelings;
otherwise, the oral language was used). i made my eyes go
blue and said "hello"...
"hi, stranger! sorry for the incident... the kids had been
playing... how do you feel in your new body?"
"w... well, it's ok but i still... have to get used to it i
guess..."
"don't worry, you'll get used to it... come with me, i'll
introduce you to the tribe..."
"thanks... but... you know.. since i arrived in this world,
i don't understand half of the things happening... you don't
seem that surprised! what happened? and what's your name
anyway? mine's tom"
she started laughing and replied
"i know your name was tom! but you'll have to choose
another name here... mine's kali... as for what happened to
you, you'll understand later! i don't know how you got these
pills, but now that you're here, it will be very hard to get
you back!"
"how... how come did you know about my name and the
pills?!"
she seemed to be amused when i asked this... she just
smiled, and remained silent...


 

offline uzim on 2002-07-09 11:45 [#00302719]
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*bump!*


 

offline Bob Mcbob on 2002-07-09 13:01 [#00302768]
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i looked around to see where i was..it seemed to be standing
outside my house, and yet i wasnt...he whole town seemed
slightly different somehow, colder...more menacing....yet i
recognised all of it....


 

offline Bob Mcbob on 2002-07-09 14:29 [#00302915]
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*blech*

i mean *bump*


 

offline Amonbrune from Vancouver (Canada) on 2002-07-09 18:19 [#00303240]
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These people grabbed my arm very harshly and slapped me
around. They asked me if i knew afecks tin and I said no.
i approached them with a raised eyebrow.

"what is afecks tin?"

One of the group dressed in luminesent clothing came up to
me. He was about my size and was obviously these peoples'
leader...a king perhaps. He rubbed his chin gracefully.

"Afecks tin is of something grand my son"

His belly wobbed because he was fat...not phat..he was fat.
He fell down to the ground and rolled and laughed. Some
nearby helped him back up.

"You stupid earthling!" He shouted at me. Slapped me across
the face and gave me the finger.

I woke up with a cold sweat in my bed. I realized I had
just eaten my own pillow.


 

offline astralwerx from Glasgow (United Kingdom) on 2002-07-09 18:22 [#00303245]
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you guys are fucked up.


 

offline ecnadniarb on 2002-07-09 18:25 [#00303255]
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"Afecks tin is of something grand my son"

The alien was cockney? Probably Squarepusher on acid or
something...


 

offline Amonbrune from Vancouver (Canada) on 2002-07-09 18:26 [#00303257]
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UZIM YOU ARE THE GREATEST!!!!!!! Write a book man! I was on
the edge of my seat reading that!

:)!!

HOLY KIZZOW!!!

HIGH FIDELITY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


 

offline Amonbrune from Vancouver (Canada) on 2002-07-09 18:26 [#00303259]
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LOL!!!!!! @ Ecnabniarb


 

offline Zephyr Twin from ΔΔΔ on 2002-07-09 18:35 [#00303280]
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Yes, uzim that was excellent, I would like to read more of
that. Don't quite know where to take the story now that Amon
drowned it. ;)


 

offline Amonbrune from Vancouver (Canada) on 2002-07-09 18:46 [#00303305]
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awww be niiice.

forget i said anything and continue :)


 

offline uzim on 2002-07-15 21:37 [#00310452]
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sorry, but i'd rather start from your follow-up... :)

...then i realized i wasn't in my bed, but in a bed in a
weird room... it was like a fake room, made for a theater
piece or something, and i had tubes attached to my body,
like tubes in hospitals to feed people when they can't feed
themselves... i could hear weird noises on the outside, and
strange devices were in the room as well...

then a guy, dressed in a white uniform, entered my room and
looked astonished...

— oh...! you finally woke up! hello...
— h... hello, but... w—who are you? where am i? where's
kali? why are your eyes not triangular? wh...
— please, calm down!! you just passed thirty-four years in
some sort of coma...
— w... what? thirty-four years? you're kidding!
— i'm afraid i'm not! remove your feeding tubes, get up
and look outside your window...

as i looked outside, i realized to my horror that he was
right... everything had changed, and even a lot more than i
could expect from thirty-four years in the coma... it was a
weird city filled with weird vegetation, weird animals,
weird people, weird beings that i couldn't tell if they were
people or animals, weird buildings...

— oh... my... god...
— calm down, sit down. as you can see, lots of things have
changed when you were in your coma; that's because we have
established contact with people from other planets. they
helped us fight pollution, we collaborated with them to
develop science, technology and stuff... you'll have to get
used to that!

he grinned, obviously trying to reassure me. in vain — i
was terrified.

— i'll show you everything you need to see and explain
everything you need to know, don't worry.
— b—but... my wife... my house... my pets...
— yeah, well... huh... i can't really help you for this...
and... * oh, hello kali!

the door opened again, and kali, the same alien that was in
my dream, entered. she grinned at me. the same grin, again.
she seemed to be aware that i already knew her from my
dream.

— she's my assistant! she comes


 

offline uzim on 2002-07-15 21:37 [#00310453]
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from the planet òjnìda VIII. a very nice person, indeed!


 

offline Zephyr Twin from ΔΔΔ on 2002-07-16 05:21 [#00310768]
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uzim, please, continue. I would add but I'm tired and I
would just fuck it up. But I vote that you continue cuz ur
just so damn good at it! :)


 

offline uzim on 2002-07-16 13:26 [#00311165]
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the man in the white uniform said to me as kali entered the
room that he had to go because he had other patients to
see... and i was left alone, with kali in my room.

— hello, tom! are you allright?
— yeah, thanks kali... do you know... i already know you?
nice to meet you again!
— yes, i noticed that! that's because... that's quite a
long story. when you swallowed your pills, you fell in coma
- you were really close to death in fact - and stood in your
bed for three weeks... then your neighbours started to worry
about you, they called the police, and when they found you
they brought you to the hospital. unfortunately, your coma
was kind of... special, and no one managed to bring you
back. so they did what they could to keep you alive, and you
stood like this for... twenty-nine years (it's a miracle
that you survived that long!).
in 2028, people coming from òjnìda VIII (including me)
came to earth; citizens, scientists, doctors, artists, etc.
we collaborated with humans, they learned a lot of things
from us and we learned a lot of things from them as well...
i'm a doctor. i got a job in this hospital, and i managed to
bring you back from your coma — progressively. i won't
tell you all the details, but i saw you open your eyes,
while you were still in coma... you stared at me... this
could explain why i was in your dream.

(i thought... this would explain why i saw her in my dream,
but not why i knew her name and everything! she must have
hidden me something... but i preferred not to say anything
about it.)

— so... you saved my life, right?
— no, not entirely! i just woke you up... the people who
saved your life are the doctors of this hospital! the doctor
mills is one of them.
— doctor mills...? is he the person i saw when i woke up?
— yes, it's him! now, if you feel right, would you mind we
going to the coffee shop together?

(oh, btw... the scene plays in amsterdam, in 2036. and 34 is
the number of parts of dante's inferno if i remember :))


 

offline thanksomuch from planet claire on 2002-07-17 06:18 [#00312340]
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and the dish ran away with the spoon.


 


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