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hey, i have a up. it's fun. please read it. raaar. |
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you seem like a good kid, but everytime i read one or your stories the descriptions feel more lubricated than my arsehole, yet the flow is like sticklebrick in mud. i'm not being mean, i just can't gel with it. y'know? |
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that's cool. not many people on this forum are literate. |
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do you not feel thats a slightly condescending attitude? |
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world. Androgyny can be an enticing character trait, but your exposition sucks. Really, I couldn't get past the sentence above. What the fuck does that mean? No, really, what are you trying to imply with that sentence? Some kind of imagery? Some kind of emotion? Well it ain't working. I wonder, do you read literature at all? Novels, short stories? Published work, that is. I think that if you did you might have a better understanding about telling a story that people can follow. Just a thought... |
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No one understands your genius, so deeply hidden is it beneath the groaning, churning tide of verbosity and overwrought similes wrapped up in a narrative style that's as inviting as a pig's armpit |
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Hahhahahahahaha! Are you included in this estimation? |
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Logorrhoea (US/Canadian logorrhea) (Greek λογορροια, logorrhoia, "word-flux") is defined as an "excessive flow of words" and, when used medically, refers to incoherent talkativeness that occurs in certain kinds of mental illness, such as mania. The spoken form of logorrhoea (in the non-medical sense) is a kind of verbosity that uses superfluous or fancy words to disguise a useless or simple message as useful or intellectual, and is commonly known as "verbal diarrhoea". |
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:D |
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"Pomobabble" is maybe a bit more catchy. pomobabble |
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oh no, here comes dog belch! |
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not many people on this forum are literate. --optimus prime Then why the fuck do you post your pomobabble here? |
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really, though, i like my writing style. a lot of people do. it's an acquired taste. you can just go read bradbury or irvine welsh or something. this topic is for people who want to read my story. i'm already aware of the faults you think i have because you post in every single story topic i make. |
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because people like to read it instead of just blindly following their internet forum idols? |
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by 'not many people on this forum are literate' i mostly meant people like dog_belch. sure, he spends his life reading an intelligent dance music forum, but that's only giving him the wrong ideas about the english language. |
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Who are these people? Internet idols? |
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dog_belch is a nob. but he, in this instance, has a valid point. i was the best english student at school in my day, and trust me, your literacy skills are rubbish. i was trying to be constructive in my first post, but now i can't be bothered. |
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what internet idols? do you mean internet forum idols? dog_belch is mine. he's so dreamy! |
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I'm currently reading Robert Aickman, before I sat at this laptop, and I'm itching to get back to it once I finish coding some little web project. That is literature. That's ... more ideas than can fit in your head, that's the joy of reading, that's a page turner, that's haunting imagery that stays with you for life. That's writing. And what's wrong with Ray Bradbury, he's a consumate storyteller. Unlike you who can't string a single readable sentence together. |
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nah, he doesn't have a valid point. he never does. he just has his own persuasive opinions that he tries to shove down people's throats as facts. and you weren't trying to be constructive, so don't give me that. my literacy skills aren't rubbish. :p they're rubbish to you, yes. |
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all i ever get from your posts is how jealous you are of my creativity. :( |
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are you for real? |
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nah, i'm just playing around with dog_blech since he seems to be really bored. he's at his peak when he's being bitter. |
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I despair. I despair slightly more than I do normally. |
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:) |
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i just smelt the visionary window of a lucid dragon turdular hexagon glazed effluent fart. i dwindled down an emotional chrome road lined only with the dreams of dinosaurs and rolled upon a magical crock of lush slanted flowers. as i lifted the fainting chalkboard into a position of practical fantasy i realised i was bored and its time to go to bed. |
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if only that was an original joke. :( |
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true, but you pride yourself on that ridiculous style of writing. |
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i'm the most pretentious wanker when it comes to writin'. |
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"turdular hexagon" was good. Could be a Tycho track. |
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idiot. |
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well, obviously not. and i mean you no ill will in any case. i just defend my mutated babies to the tooth and nail. |
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good thread, i won't bother with the story |
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I concur. |
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I enjoyed it and you people are being dicks for no discernable reason. |
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I'll have to check it out later.. I'm reading a lot of other stuff right now because I have two papers to finish... |
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I wouldnt say its awful but I find the style bumbling and irritating, the constant mash of the same old metaphysics/aimless modern references/forced wackiness is hard enough without the inelegant sentences... i only managed two paragraphs. I get the feeling you write it all and then look back and add yet more adjectives and metaphors, it might be an idea to trim it down it a bit instead. |
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I'm sorry, I found it too contrived and dull to enjoy. |
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