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offline hyakusen from 8=============> on 2005-01-21 15:53 [#01470991]
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falling leafs

seeing you posting at this em-be
makes me a little bee-dee-dee-bee

hitting the keyboard, why, my oh, why
she wanted to kiss me, but it was a lie

i started to wank, i started to cry
hitting the keyboard, why, my oh, why

the tears are faling, so as the leafs
beeing a mod here makes me believe

that this whole webpage, with "more stuff coon"
is just a myth, like, sun and the moon

dont cry too hard, babe, dont wank to fast
the wankarz are sleepy, but not the last

the leafs are falling, just like my tears
for all who read this - regards and peas



 

offline qrter from the future, and it works (Netherlands, The) on 2005-01-21 15:57 [#01470997]
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cheesy peas?


 

offline ecnadniarb on 2005-01-21 15:57 [#01470999]
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Beautiful, poignant and a joy to have experienced.


 

offline Dannn_ from United Kingdom on 2005-01-21 16:01 [#01471007]
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"more stuff coon"?

works for me


 

offline hyakusen from 8=============> on 2005-01-21 16:02 [#01471010]
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you just know sheet about artistic way of seeing letters


 

offline Raz0rBlade_uk on 2005-01-21 16:06 [#01471023]
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genius


 

offline hobbes from age on 2005-01-21 16:15 [#01471035]
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Squeezy cheesy peas!


 

offline i_x_ten from arsemuncher on 2005-01-21 16:26 [#01471062]
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poetry is a performance art.


 

offline k_maty on 2005-01-21 16:44 [#01471092]
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*tear*


 

offline godataloss from Cleveland (United States) on 2005-01-21 22:42 [#01471784]
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"dont wank to fast"

should read don't wank too fast- poetic liscense be
damned.

other than that it sucks.


 

offline corrupted-girl on 2005-01-22 14:09 [#01472562]
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wow. that's intense.


 

offline ecnadniarb on 2005-01-22 14:16 [#01472567]
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"don't wank to fast" was one of my favourite parts, and why
would it have to be changed to "don't wank too fast"? Then
it loses a lot of its meaning.

dont cry too hard, babe, dont wank to fast
the wankarz are sleepy, but not the last


This section is explaining that in this world that moves at
an unrelenting pace:

don't feel sorry for yourself ("dont cry too hard")
"babe" is a direct reference to the generic sociological
labelling,
"don't wank to fast" Stop chasing after self satisfaction
because it will lead to missing out on everything that is on
offer, like an unnecessary fasting from food.

It's brilliant.


 

offline obara from Utrecht on 2005-01-22 14:16 [#01472569]
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it;s like Bullwinkle poetry corner :)


 

offline godataloss from Cleveland (United States) on 2005-01-22 14:19 [#01472572]
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Well now that you've explained it Id have to say it just
mostly sucks.


 

offline obara from Utrecht on 2005-01-22 14:26 [#01472576]
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Marcin, you're my member of 2005 so far, unofficially - for
this one poem


 


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