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...put needle in violin's eyes dolls with fake heart played it whole my life nobody dropped a tear. |
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That has to be the most profound piece of poetry I have read in a long long time. Are you a published poet? If you are not then I would like to know why not. You are depriving the whole world of your gift |
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i don't understand the grammar. the structure is fine, but "played it whole my life" doesn't mean anything unless it is kinda of aliteration where "whole" sounds like "all" "dolls with fake heart" <-- you either forgot the "S" or that just doesn't make sense. ---------- not trying to be overly critical, it is a nice shrot piece, but it certainly makes no sense in english, perhaps a translation from some more romantic language? |
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give my type of "short = shrot" perhaps that is all that confused me, a few typos on your part...... |
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Maybe it is supposed to be contravertial. bill_hicks, I have my moments. HAHAHAHAHA heh... etceteras |
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and also violins dont have eyes but i liked like 3 try for a hikoo next |
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bob it was only out of tune. |
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And it was playing about the war in BEEEEEP! |
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first line of bill hicks' response to that = classic. I'm on the floor. |
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Hey, I've heard that word before. Hikoo, Hiku, what is it? |
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5 short syllables and then a line of seven then another 5 |
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Could you write one? Sorry, I don't understand. |
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i did write one! gah! |
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Haha, uh, ok. What's the meaning of it? |
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i thought explaining what a hikoo was in the form of a hikoo was pretty classy, and your stepping all over it :P |
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haiku |
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