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https://soundcloud.com/llc/mistakes For context, I wrote this song immediately after ending a 3 year relationship with my first live-in girlfriend. I know it may not be exactly the type of stuff you guys might typically listen to all the time, but I'm pretty happy with my progress in getting a better mix for myself. Feel free to let me know what you think! |
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you're probably too talented for this forum |
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Hahaha, thanks man. I really appreciate that lol. |
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well-produced but it's a bit bland for me |
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you tell us nothing by saying that you did this after breaking with your gf, were you angry, crying or calm, what you want to say |
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whats the emotion attached to the music, and why that makes it worth to link the link |
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*click the link |
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you should have covered this |
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Thanks belb, I appreciate your input even though it doesn't appeal to you stylistically. =) As far as my emotional state while writing the music, I was definitely upset, but also very calm. The relationship was really difficult as she has severe borderline personality disorder, and often had extreme emotional episodes where she yell and scream at me for extended periods of time over the smallest of things, or threaten self harm by cutting or overdosing on prescription medications (xanax and klonopin specifically, which I had to take her to the hospital for several times.) For a long time, I didn't end the relationship because I felt that perhaps I deserved to be with someone that didn't contribute financially and seemed to punish me emotionally for anything she perceived to be wrong. I had it in mind that I wasn't good enough to be with another girl, and that no one would actually want me anyway. My self-worth was pretty shot after spending so much time being cut down by her, even though I knew that her disorder was the cause of her acting like that. When finally broke up with her, my emotions were a mixture of sadness at knowing that I wouldn't see her again, and relief to be done with the stress of knowing that it was only a matter of time before the next blowup over something that most people wouldn't even bat an eye at. I was calm to the point that immediately after hanging up the phone (she was in Florida visiting her mother at the time), I grabbed my guitar and began writing, the lyrics forming out of the mindset that I didn't need this person to validate my self-worth. What I really needed was to feed my passion by creating music again (something which I could never take the time to do while with her.) Having to leave someone you love because you know it can't work is one that I hope others can relate to, and and perhaps the music can make them feel hopeful for the future in knowing that someone else knows exactly how that feels. |
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I think tapping into emotions is paramount for making interesting music, well I reckon it is, have you tried making music on a more subliminally emotional level? I know it sounds pretentious but it isn't really, like the sounds of grass under your feet, how the sky looks that sort of thing, it might be more tenuous and hard to categorise but I think it generally leads to more interesting stuff, I mean after all do we need another song about relationships? not to disparage what you have done, you are clearly talented |
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ok, i played it, you have talent with the voice, bit like jimmy edgar, the music is a bit cheesy for the xlt standard, well produced like it just came out of the studio but a bit bland like belb said |
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as for for your gf, better to leave than self flagellation |
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Yeah to be honest I actually kind of tried to keep this song on the simpler side to an extent. The reason I ended up making this conscious decision was to make it easier to focus on doing what I can to increase my production value to my best ability. Earlier stuff that I created with a friend made me feel as if we might have been trying to do to much without really taking the steps to get a proper mix. I do want to vary my sound a lot though, so I like writing more complex and intricate stuff too. That said, I know that this definitely doesn't align with the style of music that most people here listen to, so I appreciate the honest feedback and opinions. This is one of the more pop-esque songs that I will probably ever write, but most of my stuff will probably be more of a down-tempo flavor in some capacity. I do actually prefer more interesting topics for lyrics, though sometimes those can be tough for me to write, depending on my mood. For some reason lyrics have always seemed to come easier to me when upset or depressed, don't know why. Thanks for the feedback though! |
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to quote sammie i like it i mean those other ppl are right saying its not revolutionizing music but tbqh that is implicitly accepting the rock critic mindset of music as a linear progression in 1 direction which 1 neednt subscribe 2. i listen and enjoy this kind of music and i thought ur track was rly nicely made |
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thanks for your explanation man. i hope as a result of your ended relationship you make more music and be here a bit more, we're in a shortage of memebers you might have noticed. |
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talking of emotional relationship-based music-making, this is the one track I ever made that still breaks me whenever I listen to it: I made it while trying to escape an incredibly abusive (physically and emotionally) relationship |
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After ending a long-term relationship based purely on sexual turmoil I wrote a song called "Sanguine Serenade" and whilst no recording survives, I still kind of remember how it went, something like DRANG!!!!! Why¿?????? DRANG!!!! You fffffffffffffuckin' DRANG!!!!!! Bitch!!!!!! DRANG!!!! Why????? Aaaagggghhhhhh!!!! FUCK! Powerful stuff I think you'll agree. |
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I enjoyed your track marlowe, thanks for sharing! I feel for you, people that haven't been in an abusive relationship often can't understand how difficult it can be to get out of. My ex was pretty damned emotionally abusive, and while she would slap and hit me at times too, it wasn't something that was realistically going to hurt me. I'm sorry you had to experience that, and I hope you escaped with a little sanity still intact! I know my brush with crazy definitely did a number on me for a while there. Thanks again for all the comments guys, I will definitely post some more stuff on here when I feel like I've got a proper mix going. |
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yeah, people can be pretty dismissive about it, they don't understand the sustained nature of it, and the brutality and stress of it - thankfully I've been four years clear of this nut case, glad that you got clear too |
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