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I play guitar and keyboards, and my friend Halo is singing. This song was inspired by a series of short stories written by her grandmother, who suffered from Lupus Erythmatosis all her life. The stories inspired this song. Questions, comments, mailbombs welcome. And yes, I know we need a drummer. We're working on it. |
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quite impressive Oddioblender! I especially like the ending where the 'me' is refrained until the final moment with overlapping lines prior to it. Nice! |
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well, i didn't like it but that's just me. |
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it was mainly the singing, but the guitar also sounded a little out of tune, though maybe that was intentional. |
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I have to agree the singing lacked..erm.. passion? |
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i don't see what was wrong with the singing, but it IS a demo so i'll accept any criticism you give me for improvement's sake. thanks for listening! |
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I'm not knocking what you're trying to do, I really like what I've heard of your electronic music, so keep it up. to be honest I just didn't like the sound of her voice, but at least she's trying. I didn't think there was a whole lot of flow in the lyrics, which is something I like to see. It might just be me, but the delivery of the lyrics seemed a bit... forced.(not sure if i've got the right word here) I hope this is taken as the constructive criticism it is meant to be. :) |
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no, no, all criticism is appreciated! this is a demo, so the song will be improved over time. she's trained in musical theatre so her voice is a bit theatrical but i like that. we probably need a backtrack for the vox. we were actually on a deadline so we were kind of rushing for it.... the song was for her family and they didn't like it, unfortunately... i'll have some more electronic stuff up soon, plus some stuff from my new hiphop group, 1-Up (Powerup Posse.) |
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*listens* ROFLMANIA XII |
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eh? |
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Honestly, it's shit. |
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i don't like the singing much |
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well, i have to agree about the singing... while she may be a very talented singer (i don't know), this is just not a good performance. lyrics are very difficult to pull off sometimes, so my advice is think less of having music and lyrics in two separate boxes, and think about how the lyrics could work with the music together. the best lyrics aren't always the best words written - more often it's the way it is delivered. and with this kind of music, the singer is the most noticeable element of a song... i agree with zephyr twin's comments - theatrical or no, it isn't really working. aside from that, why do you guys need a drummer? just program oddio's famous beats and bring along a tape to gigs? i think that would be cool. |
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lol |
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yes, i see what you mean. thank you, that helps. |
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