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Hello I just uploaded 2 of my songs and was wondering if,when you have the time,you would critique them for me. The broken song is cut a few seconds short for some reason hope you like them http://zebox.com/diazo/ sorry dont know how to do a link |
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..downloading.. i can't say no to that cat. |
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ill eventually get around to checking them out too. |
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Thanks for the link guys! |
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d'ling now |
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Broken sounds nice man. Quite similar to Plaid material, like the drum beats, and nice melody Like the hihat triplets on down your feathers. Nice programming, i dont like the crash cymbals tho. The piano melodies are great |
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Thank you for listening my friend! |
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Ill try and replace the crash cyms and see what it sounds like...i was kinda thinking they were too much myself |
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Yeah the crashes were the only thing that put me off, other than that a well structured track |
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now d/l'ing - check out some of mine in return. |
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I listened to three tracks from your old stuff, sounds like music for video games I love chronologichimes that song owns! |
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now listening to and enjoying downyour feathersfall. lots of good melody - especially that piano which is damned pretty. and that hard percussion loop that kicks in around 1:30 or so is fucking wicked. my only suggestion would to be make the low-end a bit stronger - i hear mostly midrange and highend - perhaps some low sines or some subtle bass hits. other than that, this track is quite solid. well done. |
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Thank you sir I shall give it a shot! |
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you're quite welcome - i don't recommend changing anything else of this superb track - add, do not subtract. |
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Cool Thank you very much for your time! |
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i listened to downyourfeathersfall and broken. i like the melodies but i think the sounds need a bit more variety. to summarize i think the main strengths are the melodies and the programming. the weakness is in sound selection. these are nice tracks but maybe could use some more buffing out. maybe some subtle effects to make the beats more dynamic. and i think oddio is right in saying it needs some low-end accompanyment or harmonization. not bad stuff though. thanks for sharing. |
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broken - not bad, not bad. i like the old school-sounding synths and melodies especially. the drum sounds kinda aren't really my thing in some parts, but they fit interestingly in their rhythmic accenting to it.. sorta spastic and haphazard sounding. i really like the melodic type parts at around 50 seconds in. the melodies are gorgeous, but i would say your beat sounds might need a bit of work. they might sound a bit better if you tweaked some of the individual percussion samples up a bit more so they were a little less generic sounding. i had the same trouble a while back, but if you experiment and screw around enough with the sounds, you can make even basic, overly used drum samples sound unique. i wanted to give you a bit of constructive criticism.. i just think your songs would be more stand-out with a bit more experimentation. besides my minor quibbles, it's a nice little song. |
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Thank you both for listening I shall definitely try that out |
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BTW I always welcome constructive criticism, how could I improve without it? |
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downyourfeathersfall - i agree about the lowrange, definately needs some bass. the melodies are decent in this song (dont get me wrong, they are pretty, but not very "hooking" to me), but what really stands out is the drums, I think you did some cool stuff with the rhythms in this song. broken - I don't like the drums as much in this song, but they are decent. Once again I find the melodies pleasing but not very hooking. By "hooking," I mean they don't make me say "SHIT! I wanna hear that again!" I think both of the tracks as a whole would benefit from a little bit less repetition. All in all I'd say you're on the right track, but still missing something. |
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I really liked "down your feathers fall". The piano part is great. Reminds me of mid-90's dance/r&b, only mixed with drill. That's a good thing in my book. One thing I didn't like was the crash cymbal sound you kept using. Overall very nice track! |
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Thank you both for listening i appreciate your time! yeah that crash was something that never sat right with me |
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I like 'em Im not a big fan of the synth sounds or the samples used but the melodies and programming are really good! |
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Thank you! |
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i like the melodies, but it sounds TOO midi. experiment a bit with attack and decay and less quantizing. |
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Cool thank you for listening Ill set the quantizing a bit lower... |
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Two nice tracks here, both different. 'Down your feathers fall' had a nice fast harsh pace to it and seemed the most developed. My favourite was probably Broken because it seemed to have a bit more content. Broked was smoother and had nice melodies. I think both need a little more work. Let us know when you've got more! |
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Damn thanks to all of you who have listened to it! I appreciate all of your words! Jazembo I shall definitely post new stuff when I create it! Thanks again |
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Instead of making another thread I decided to use this one. These are 3 new songs I was thinking about adding to a demo I wish to send out. They are not done and I would like your opinions on what to do with them as well as your overall opinions on the songs themselves. Thank you for your time! www.zebox.com/diazo/ |
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anybody? |
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i listened to Celestial Meadows - very nice - the chimes go really well with that little percussion/reverse bit - i think if you have the song develop into a verse with a more definable deep bass part maybe using 10ths it could develop into a really great track - so far its good. |
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thank you for listening sir! |
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no problemo. you manage to get that link to mine working? |
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When I go to your site it just has a picture with no links for songs |
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starting to dl now, i wish i would have grabbed those 3 earlier songs, are they still availible somwhere ? Did you ever get the afx and the boc t-shirts made, let me know im still interested in seeing/buying one. |
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Hey man I sent them to the addres you gave me and you never responded. So i take it you never got it... If thats the case Ill send you another AFX shirt however I have worn it a few times. Send me your address in email again just to make sure I have the correct one |
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really?that sucks i wonder what the heck went wrong if you want to send me one im at (still) thad smoyer po box 96 roca,nebr. 68430 usa about the first 3 songs, anyway for me to get them? im now dl "Pendulum", tori amos ? what cd is that one? i just askd my wife and she didnt know. dude, i swear to god i didnt get them |
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The song is called Leather..there is only a few seconds of it on there |
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pendulum is really good - very dynamic. i like how you used some guitar and cut up the drums nicely. and that breakdown at the end is really cool. celestial meadows is cool as well. nice quiet track... |
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Cool Thank you very much for listening! |
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i probsably would havbe guessed that, good song, im only 89% d/l your song and 95% w/Celestial Meadows2 |
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thank you for listening Thad! |
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ive listened to that first track and thought it was really really good |
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Thank you for listening Big very cool of you! Anyone else? (bump in other words) |
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yes i am an IDM'er too |
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ummm your link didnt work man...but thanks for listening woj |
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False Prophet Drummer I like this a lot...I think the drums would have benefited from a little externalization or however you americans would describe it...at the moment they sound a little central and flat...but the tune in general is really really nice. Celestial Meadows Nice ambient peice...I can imagine it sitting nicely between two heavier beat driven tracks on an album or EP. Pendulam Hmm the track is nice...I can't help but wonder how it would have sounded with a different drum sample in place of the one you used...something a bit more unusual...I think the track would probably go from being good to excellent. At the moment the drum sounds you have used make it sound a bit like generic drum and bass. I like the section at about the 3 minute mark though. |
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Thank you for listening Braindance, I appreciate it! I shall try messing with the drum samples and post it up if I find anything I like. Thanks! Do you mean messing with the panning on False Prophet? |
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not really panning. there are a few plugins and stuff you can use that sort of make samples sound little further apart in the sound field...I am shit at describing what I mean...I just know how I want things to sound :P |
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Hmmm Ill look into it, do you know of any online site where I could buy or download plugins for Reason Or Sonar? |
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