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         |  Clipper
             from in a cave with my two friends (United States) on 2003-07-14 00:53 [#00777918] Points: 420 Status: Lurker
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 | i've been reading a load of ee cummings lately and it affects greatly the style in which i write( the way i think
 even ),so these two pieces i think deserve this disclaimer,
 which is a practice (disclaiming) i usually disagree with
 but fuck it: the style of these poems is one absorbed and
 one that pays its thanks to cummings...thanks to you who
 have doubtless started a worm farm of your own by
 now...anywayhere's'em:
 
 1.
 
 eyes leapin'
 to shades;
 foreign...
 after new
 nap art.
 
 today's had
 me accident
 ally memori
 zed...like a
 nun wanted pH
 one number.
 
 so mother birds
 her young,
 further learns
 my lung.
 permanent burn's
 our tongue,
 
 and i sleep
 into shade...
 for an
 afternoon
 apart
 
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 2.
 
 oh cleanest and
 soberest am,
 not for the last
 half a while, has
 been mistaken
 when it is as:
 
 i spent,
 in some reach behind
 my back two years,
 a nights--or so--
 caffein
 g with cups,
 and some coff
 in' e'ery morn
 in'; but cre am
 and sug are
 for me to get ups.
 
 then, soloft
 y this day's now,
 a zee to soft
 en the cups' blow--
 one and a half of
 one is one
 hunnert fitty;
 such numbers turn
 today to past
 el yellow.
 
 last, 20--but yet,
 as of now,the keen
 est--milligrams of, i
 am fed, a mean
 mess of energy's lie;
 it sticks to my
 throat, is swallow in
 nest, but sets the ladder tall,
 keeps airythings high
 w/out bein' hollow, 'n
 manages to makem atterall.
 
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 thanks for all your all times, popes, peace
 
 -n
 
 
 
 
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         |  corticalstim
             from Canada on 2003-07-14 01:01 [#00777919] Points: 3885 Status: Regular
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 | nice - i like the choppy structure of it -  suits the lyrical structure and imagery of the poems
 
 
 
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         |  Q4Z2X
             on 2003-07-14 01:38 [#00777928] Points: 5264 Status: Lurker | Followup to Clipper: #00777918
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 | nice.. i am a big fan of cummings poems, and i really like these too.. i ejoyed the parts about how a "nun wanted pH
 one number"
 very interesting.. nice work..
 i've also got some in a somewhat similar,
 cummings-influenced style as well.. i've been writing tons
 lately, they are located here if you or anyone
 else is interested.
 
 it's allways fun to read some creative, interesting poetry
 on the board..
 
 
 
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         |  Clipper
             from in a cave with my two friends (United States) on 2003-07-14 02:13 [#00777939] Points: 420 Status: Lurker
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 | an unwanted phone number is the answer to that part......heh, sorry 'bout that...i like that my poems have
 answers.....q4z2x you thanks have, it will...man of all ours
 
 
 
 
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         |  Q4Z2X
             on 2003-07-14 02:16 [#00777941] Points: 5264 Status: Lurker
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 | i get it now.. i like how this stuff can be interpreted many different ways, just how by how you read it..
 
 
 
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         |  Clipper
             from in a cave with my two friends (United States) on 2003-07-14 02:29 [#00777944] Points: 420 Status: Lurker
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 | yeah...maybe i should say something about the second one, seeing how it has a lot to do with personal stuffs: i was
 arrested for selling pot plant last nov and have been sober
 ever since...this poem refers to the time i've been
 'sober'...i've been disagreeing with the validity of my
 supposed sobriety lately because of the daily legal drugs
 i've been doing/prescribed...all of these three drugs and
 the dosages are hidden in the three parts of the
 poem....solvent
 
 
 
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         |  Anus_Presley
             on 2003-07-14 02:48 [#00777946] Points: 23472 Status: Lurker
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 | love em. simple as that. i always do. 
 
 
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         |  Clipper
             from in a cave with my two friends (United States) on 2003-07-14 10:12 [#00778320] Points: 420 Status: Lurker
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 | thank you your anus 
 
 
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         |  Q4Z2X
             on 2003-07-14 14:00 [#00778635] Points: 5264 Status: Lurker
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 | blump 
 
 
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