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offline Clipper from in a cave with my two friends (United States) on 2003-02-07 15:03 [#00545583]
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this is what i see

i see
sweaty hoodies wearing boys with
Rorshach chests
and hair like helmets...
i see
spit on chins and chins on breasts and
sparking mouths
like toy godzillas...
i see
a world where headphones are earplugs
and racecars
scrimmage on giant treadmills...
and
i see
my legs crossed and stretched out over
it all with
untied shoelaces...


 

offline fleetmouse from Horny for Truth on 2003-02-07 15:11 [#00545593]
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Clipper, I hope I don't jinx your shit by telling you this,
but you have talent. Keep writing. Very nice imagery.


 

offline Clipper from in a cave with my two friends (United States) on 2003-02-07 15:17 [#00545600]
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gee thanks fleetmouse...i will


 

offline fleetmouse from Horny for Truth on 2003-02-07 15:20 [#00545606]
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Have you been posting stuff here for a while? I remember one
other... do you have a stash of pomes online somewhere?


 

offline Clipper from in a cave with my two friends (United States) on 2003-02-07 15:21 [#00545609]
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i have a journal with a few on livejournal.com



 

offline Clipper from in a cave with my two friends (United States) on 2003-02-07 15:23 [#00545612]
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try going to www.livejournal.com/users/30daysettlement


 

offline fleetmouse from Horny for Truth on 2003-02-07 15:26 [#00545613]
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OK I will

there was nothing for user "clipper"


 

offline fleetmouse from Horny for Truth on 2003-02-07 15:31 [#00545616]
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Linkified

Ah yes, the one with the turnstile eyes. Good shit. Don't
let my praise go to your head because nothing is deadlier to
poetry than pride.


 

offline Clipper from in a cave with my two friends (United States) on 2003-02-07 15:35 [#00545620]
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oh...that's for sure


 

offline Anus_Presley on 2003-02-07 16:00 [#00545630]
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can you not be prroud of what you crreate? i don't see how
being prroud of what is alrready crreated can effect it...


 

offline fleetmouse from Horny for Truth on 2003-02-07 16:05 [#00545634]
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If you get too full of yourself your output becomes pompous
bullshit. Especially with poetry, where it is all too easy
to let your emotions run wild and become syrupy, or
sanctimonious, or ostentatiously hateful.

It's a tightrope walk.


 

offline Anus_Presley on 2003-02-07 16:11 [#00545638]
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i have wrrote about 3 rreplies to this now, each time
changing my arrgument, but i can't say what i want to...
prride can be good... but bad.


 

offline fleetmouse from Horny for Truth on 2003-02-07 16:20 [#00545645]
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For an artist or writer pride is like food and drink. As
Piet Hein put it:

Of drink and victuals
and suchlike stuff
a little too little
is just enough


 

offline Anus_Presley on 2003-02-07 16:24 [#00545649]
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sounds rright


 

offline fleetmouse from Horny for Truth on 2003-02-07 16:28 [#00545653]
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You ever read Piet Hein? He was a Dutch mathematician,
scientist and writer who wrote these wonderful little
advice-poems called Grooks


 

offline Anus_Presley on 2003-02-07 16:31 [#00545658]
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lol no i haven't i'll check him out...


 

offline Anus_Presley on 2003-02-07 16:34 [#00545663]
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Naive you are
if you believe
life favours those
who aren't naive.



 

offline fleetmouse from Horny for Truth on 2003-02-07 16:39 [#00545665]
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In view of your manner of spending your days
I hope you may learn, before ending them,
that the effort you spend on defending your ways
could better be spent on amending them.--Piet Hein

The ultimate smackdown!


 

offline Anus_Presley on 2003-02-07 16:41 [#00545666]
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"The ultimate smackdown!" sez it all


 


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