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there was a poetry topic not too long ago. i was wondering if anybody writes short stories, or i suppose into any good short story writers. i sometimes write really short, strange ones. my most recent (yesterday) is . even boring angsty teenage stuff will do. |
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i have one or maybe more little things, situations or pictures rather than short stories - but i'll have to translate it so sorry for the bad english (and the bad writing too!)... : ) "alice, in the depths of the ocean, was looking up to the surface... surely, up there, she thought - there, weird different beings must exist, maybe they can breathe the air outside... she thinks she saw one of them once, diving near to her lair. and maybe it saw her too, maybe it took her for a monster - anyway he got back to the surface rapidly, didn't stay for long... would these strange beings be afraid of her? why? it let an object drop from its metallic body.... not even a beautiful or useful object - just a bizarre thing, hexagonal, hard, with a hole in it. apart from its provenance, alice didn't see any interest in it: it couldn't be eaten, nor even being used as a decorative object. why do they bother with such objects... she put the weird little object in a shell. she carved the shell with her nails, just in case she would want to see it again, and threw it in the pit. she crept on the sea ground, then climbed upwards the rocks to the surface, to see what was outside... she took a glimpse, she wish she could swim to into this hostile environment to see more than this, but the air was drying her livid skin, and the sun burning her red eyes... once again, she crept and swimt back home, slipping in the water to the comfortable lair of hers, in the abyss. still pondering a bit about this weird world outside... what kind of monsters could live in such a hostile place?" |
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I'm writing a story right now, but it's starting to get past short... my composition teacher is going to publish some of it in our college magazine of art and writing, so that'll be pretty sweet I guess. I wish I could make a link to get some feedback, anyone tell me how? |
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I guess you barely changed enough data to not plagarize the little mermaid. |
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the little mermaid? it's not question of a mermaid in the text!! (and i didn't even read it, i just know the story in the big lines) a marine creature, she is. |
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though ok, it is rather confusing. |
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no i think it's Tom Hanks and Darryl Hannah in Splash |
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ugh. SO horrible. |
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