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A helpless love story Gimme me another reason for loving you although you’ve done what you’ve done cause I can’t find anyone No more flowers in your hand No more poems by my love No more tears in lovers land No more feelings all above No more questions in my head No more answers bring me dead Let’s call it another helpless love story Let’s see it as another saddening glory Loving you was more then all Praising you a kind of game Admiring you became my fall Knowing you that was my fame No more questions with my breath No more answers bring my death Let’s call it another helpless love story Let’s see it as another saddening glory |
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gimme me, that's double give me me |
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sorry it's way too cliché for me |
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i applaud the effort. keep trying. |
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maybe if you'd use more metaphorical descriptions... |
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ok my "problem" is that my english isn't good enough to go away from cliches, you understand? in german i write many non-chliche-poems. but i don't think that there are many people which understand. |
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I had that problem in the past, at a certain point I started using the dictionary all the time and it worked for me |
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no when i write something it has to be by myself and not by a dictionary, and on the other hand i prefer german ;) |
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